无门客 发表于 2006-8-14 08:13:50

七绝 二首

<font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#0000ff" size="6"><strong>大道何言有与无?<br/>灵光闪现只须臾。 <br/>若能解得清真意，<br/>人世何方存畏途?<br/><br/>背倚闲云跌卷席， <br/>松衫不老盼归期。 <br/>举杯何故妄为饮？ <br/>乍现灵光尽是迷！<br/><br/></strong></font>

天堂里的爱人 发表于 2006-8-14 21:43:52

<p>欣赏!</p>

暗香如沁 发表于 2006-8-16 18:10:34

<p>欣赏了。真不错。无门对格律的把握还是比较严谨的。</p><p>这有一点微小的瑕疵。</p><p>律和绝一般只首句可临韵。其他的一般都在同韵部。因为诗比词严。<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;">［八齐］迷。<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;">［四支］期。</span></span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;">无门再看一下是不是这。</span></span></p><p></p>
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